Spi Chio and the Sun

In this story I had to talk about maori’s because it was maori week today I  think that I should make my own myth about maui and the sun I know that there is already one but I will just change it around and put in my own characters. I think that the story will be very cool if you switch it all around.

Spi and Chio were shivering cold with goose bumps on their hard skin. So Spi ran and ran until he caught up to the sun but he kept on getting tired so when his energy drained Chio gave him a mutton bird to eat which gave him a lot of energy. When he got his energy he caught up to the sun.

Then the wind was in the way it was blowing him back and he could not control it so he waited for the next day it was still there so he said to Chio get me five more Mutton birds to eat I need speed and energy. So when he ate it he had a lot of Energy to do it. When he ran he ran straight through the wind and the wind went away. Then when the wind was gone he went to Chio.

So he went to go and tell Chio to bring a rope and he will Koraprapu/Grab the sun and bring it down. Suddenly he missed the sun the rope got Tahuna/Burnt. Then he said bring all of the ropes and Chio said there was only one so he said it is worth a try so he threw the rope and got it right in the center. The center is good because then you can pull it down suddenly he yelled HELP! Chio came and then when they got the sun down they and smooth skin and they were warm. While they were warm they just sat on the beach while eating Titi.

1. Follow the structure for a recount.
2. Use past tense.
3. I have used time connectives
4. My paragraphs start with a topic sentence. All the ideas are linked in the paragraph.
5. I have used powerful verbs.
6. I have an impact introduction
7. My conclusion and introduction  are linked.